Outline and Title

Hey everyone!

So we finished the outline for the short film. Jonathan and I decided on the title being Disconnected. We feel this works perfect because the main character is constantly on his phone and reliant on technology that he is disconnected from the world. Our outline isn't that good, its more of a rough draft and how we expect the movie to go.

Here it is:

Title:   * Disconnected *

Scene 1: *At school*

• Main character and friend notice pretty girl in hall
• Dialogue between main character and friend
• School bell rings and they disperse

Scene 2: *In City*

• Walking home talking with friend about how main character wants to ask out girl
• Dialogue between friend and main character

Scene 3: *Bedroom*

• Both walk in
• Main character lays on bed and friend lays on couch
• Girl text message pops up on screen
• Guy freaks out and friend jumps on bed

Scene 4: * Bedroom*

• Main character texts girl back and starts conversation
• Friend helps main character text girl
• Conversation continues until guy asks out girl and she says yes

Scene 5: * Bedroom*

• Main character starts getting ready for date
• Puts on a suit
• Sits on bed and puts on virtual headset

Scene 6 - Date: *Vista View Park*

• Montage of happy date
• No audio of them talking
• Just moving mouth and music in background

*Date ends*

Scene 7- *Bedroom*

• Takes off goggles and smiles

Scene 8- *In city

• Main character is walking on the sidewalk on his phone
• Female main character is also walking on the sidewalk on her phone
• Both walk passed one another and don't notice each other

*Scene ends*

I'm still contemplating changing the ending of it because i'm not sure the audience will get what were trying to say. I want the date to end and both characters are happy, but I still want them disconnected from the world. Having them walking down the street and passing by each other and not noticing one another signifies the fact that they are too caught up with technology and don't notice there surroundings. I'm going to try and think of alternate endings to work with so I have a variety to choose from.

Thanks guys,
Peace!